Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?

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In today’s modern world, it is commonly believed that numerous criminals repeat unlawful activities when they acquire their freedom. From my perspective, the lack of effective rehabilitation, as well as, having minor and major offenders together are the main factors causing this issue. Perhaps, a well-organized system in prison considering those challenges may be the proper solution.

Firstly, the lack of a well-structured rehabilitation plan increases the chances of releasing a damaged individual back into society. A common challenge well known by civilians is that diverse prisons do not separate minor offenders from major criminals. Communication among those different types of offenders is usually the backbone of increasing crime rates. A recent study made by the University of British Columbia found that if society offenders without criminal records go to jail, community work should be considered as the main option, while hard-core criminals should be kept apart and strongly restricted for rehab indoors. According to the study, 7 out of 10 prisons following this trend had significantly decreased their crime rates.

Secondly, having minor criminals next to hard-core offenders may highly affect the minds of minor offenders. Whereas a minor crime could be vandalism, drug driving, or running a red light, major offenders could be drug traffickers, murderers, or leaders of organized crime. The conversations that both categories could start in one jail is the perfect recipe for catastrophe. To clarify with an illustration, a well-educated serial killer like Ted Bundy, who had amazing interpersonal skills such as eloquence and proper body language, had the power to convince almost anyone to do the worst action. Thus, the communication power that a major offender may have should be avoided by the prison system.

To conclude with a proper solution, both challenges mentioned above can be eliminated by inserting an effective rehabilitation followed by the right offender organization. The rehabilitation system, as well as, the infrastructure must guarantee that minor offenders will be apart from major offenders. Hence, unwanted communication among criminals will disappear and the rehabilitation process for everyone will have a positive effect.

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Idea 1: The lack of a well-structured rehabilitation plan increases the chances of releasing a damaged individual back into society.

Idea 2: Having minor criminals next to hard-core offenders may highly affect the minds of minor offenders.

Whereas a minor crime could be vandalism, drug driving, or running a red light, major offenders could be drug traffickers, murderers, or leaders of organized crime.

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For fellow IELTS students, if we were to engage in a discussion, I’d be curious to know your thoughts on which two ideas you’d choose to include and what vocabulary you might incorporate.